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How to Protect Our Eyesight
As we can see in the picture, nowadays most students wear glasses because they are shortsighted due to high study pressure. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
This phenomenon must be paid attention to. We should reduce the time of reading and when we read, do read in the bright place so as to protect our eyes. Besides, the eye exercises are another way to keep eyes healthy. After school, wed better get more sleep so that the eyes can get more rest.
As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts. If you can follow the methods mentioned above, you can surely have a good eyesight.
名校点评：
本文采用三段论的方式，分析图画，提出建议，提出希望，叙述比较详细。文中用了两个伴随状语，使得文章非常连贯。这个独立结构也很好。此外，作者还是用了比较复杂的句子，We should reduce the...采用复合结构，讲出了多个保护视力的要点。
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好词1. phenomenon n.现象2. so as to 以便
好句1. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
在眼镜的辅助之下，他们才能将黑板看得更清楚。
好处：with引导状语表示伴随。
2. As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts.
众所周知的是，眼睛是心灵的窗户。
好处：谚语的使用增光添彩。
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